You Better Put Out

Published on Tuesday, February 5, 2013 by Katherine

Day five of the We Work for Cheese blog writing ~~contest~~ challenge gives us the post topic, “You Better Put Out.”

She couldn’t hear herself scream over the ringing in her ears. But that really didn’t matter. After all, the screaming stopped the instant her back hit the cold, hard ground.

How many years would she still feel the scrape of a single rosebush thorn grazing down her arm?

“You better put out!” he growled through gritted teeth. Bracing himself over her, he lowered his head and snarled just above her ear, “You better put out.”

She put out. There was never a choice to be made. Those many months ago, she closed her eyes, counted to ten and made certain she put out.

Her eyes cast down to the tiny baby cradled in her arms. As her mind wandered towards those darker days, she was vaguely aware of her tightening grip.

Protectively, she lowered her head towards the baby’s serene face. As her lips brushed the infant’s cheek, she was slightly aware of an odd, lingering scent of roses.

Nicky

Katherine, you continue to astonish me during this challenge. How incredibly powerful.
Cheryl P.

Nicky has it right. Powerful.
Ron

Katherine, this blew me away! What an incredible ending!

And as the others have shared before me, SO powerful!

*clapping*

Outstanding, my friend!

X
Unfinished Person

Whoa. That went in a direction I didn’t expect. Nicely done.
Ziva

Wow, Katherine, I have no words..
mikewjattoomanymornings

Good lord, I wasn’t expecting that, Katherine. Not at all. Very powerful, shocking writing. Disturbing, even.
Linda R.

You continue to surprise us. I, too, was not expecting anything like this. I agree with shocking and disturbing, but most excellently written.
P.J.

I honestly don’t think I can say much more than well done.
Laughing Mom

Wow! After Fake Barbie you have certainly taken a different route with these prompts! I am very impressed, as usual!!
Mel

Wow…. Made me angry–and then made me sad.
And now–I’m just impressed.
Boom Boom Larew

Whew! Talk about a powerfully written piece. I’ll be thinking about this one for a long time. Exquisitely done, Katherine.
Indigo Roth

Hi Katherine, a story very much like this went through my head for the prompt, and I dismissed it, too nervous, too unsure. But you faced it down and wrote it. I take my hat off to you. Powerful, but positive. Indigo x
- KZ
  
  I can second this. Something similar briefly crossed my mind, but I didn’t feel up to the challenge to do the story justice. Katherine, the fact that you “went there” and kept us all with you until the end is a very impressive thing. Great post.
Linda Medrano

Damn! You put out a masterpiece here, Katherine! I’m bowled over with this one!
mike

Wow. That’s all I can say.
MalisaHargrove

Well, crapola. I wanted to kill the bastard and then hold the baby. All those emotions in so few words. Way to go, Katherine!
nonamedufus

How did I miss this yesterday. Holy moley that was some piece. Wrought with emotion it paints quite a picture. Congratulations on such a moving post.