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Floating Across the Breeze
Published on Friday, February 1, 2013 by

Cheesy Nicky and Mike.  The bane of our existence for the next 28 days.  Why?  Because they have challenged us to a month full of daily writing.

The first day’s subject?  Cheesy.  While taking this subject and rolling with it, I hope my post is anything but.

Hail Mary

“Mom, I want to do this by myself.”

She slipped past her mother, reaching for the refrigerator handle with a line of serious determination visible across her pursed lips.

It only took her a minute to find the block of foil wrapped cheddar cheese tucked between the deli meat and flour tortillas.  Reaching in, she wrapped her small hands around the precious package and purposely walked it towards the counter.

Taking a butter knife, she slowly worked at the orange block, holding her tongue just so.  Back and forth, back and forth, she worked the knife a little at a time until she heard the soft thunk of metal to board.

She cupped her small prize and walked purposely through the kitchen and out the back door.  Nearing the patio table, her eyelids lowered as she gazed towards the cardboard box waiting for her attention.

Carefully lifting the lid, she placed the precious bit of cheese next to a small, lifeless body.  Her finger briefly stroked the soft fur one last time before she closed the box and headed towards the garden.

Her mother’s heart caught in her throat as she watched her daughter kneeling in the distance.  Absentmindedly, she held her hand to her heart as the little girl’s quiet words floated across the breeze, “Hail Mary, full of grace….”

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  • Barb

    awwwwww 🙁

  • Well crap, now I’m all sad.. Beautifully written, Katherine, and definitely not cheesy.

  • As far from cheesy as is possible. What a poignant story, Katherine. Beautifully done.

  • Mel

    Ohhhh. Wonderfully written and wonderfully sad, it that can be wonderful……

  • Nope, not cheesy at all, but beautifully said and beautifully sad.

  • That story definitely took a twist I didn’t see coming. A nicely written story.

  • Hi Katherine, you got me. Nicely done. I look forward to more. Indigo

  • I guess that animal was as dead as that cheddar cheese, eh?

  • Oh, how sad. Who knew cheese could be weaved into such a sad little story about loss. Well done!

  • Ron

    “Her mother’s heart caught in her throat as she watched her daughter kneeling in the distance. Absentmindedly, she held her hand to her heart as the little girl’s quiet words floated across the breeze, “Hail Mary, full of grace….”

    What a stunningly beautiful ending, Katherine! Beautifully written!

    Brava!

    X

  • MikeWJ

    Death?! You start 28 days of hell with a post about death?!

    Damn you for bringing a tear to my eye, Katherine. Damn you to…well, okay, not hell. Maybe to cleaning the fridge.

  • Azara

    Aw, what a beautifully non-cheesy post! I love it.

  • Well that brought me down a notch…but it was So beautiful in the tale and the writing! Bravo.

  • MalisaHargrove

    Your moving story makes it very difficult to cuss at Nicky and Mike. Damn them. No wait. That wasn’t hard at all.

  • That was not cheesy at all. I mean it was, but it wasn’t. Really well done.

  • Cadeaux

    I can’t believe someone admits to getting the crappy cheese that’s wrapped in foil…or did you wrap the cheese in foil instead of putting it in a baggie like the rest of us? I hope the cheese wasn’t expired…um…uh…oh, never mind.
    Oh, c’mon…that was a joke. Lighten up – she’s the one who started it with a death post. 😉

  • KZ

    That was entirely unexpected. I like the way you ask your reader to infer what’s happening without directly spelling everything out. Really well done!

  • Holy brilliant, Katherine!

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